Renegade

[Falix]

I fed Pen and Mayne

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Renegade
<hr style="color: rgb(51, 51, 51); background-color: rgb(51, 51, 51);" size="1"> <!-- / icon and title --> <!-- message --> Long story short... This was supposed to be a 4 verse song. I did two, my friend was to do 2 but he been taking forever and im tired of waiting. I passed it on to 80D to add a verse or two, but I can't wait any longer to upload this, cuz its one of my fave songs I made. I'm gonna up the remix when 80D's done, but heres my verses.
This song is mostly about the beat (cuz its so crazy), lyrics and flow, cuz I feel I did pretty good, lol.

SONG:
zSHARE - renegade - solo.mp3 (http://www.zshare.net/audio/12329680bbfa9fe2/)


Lyrics: (incase you wanna read a long.)

Verse 1

its falix... im sicker then cancerous necrophiliacs
like asian snacks, i merc emcees and make a meal of cats
im not real, or fact, im like a ghost hauntin
so people expect to see thunderous storms

that spread through out the whole continent
your inside my scope, you get shot in, an angel? im the opposite
I fathered Satan, im hell raising, Im oftly sick,
demented, ready to blow so light the wick

when i spit a verse, in your direction, you expire first
i wired your hearse, i got a dire of thirst
im so sick at this rap shit, i puke up flows
like i was eating X pills at one of Ja Rules shows

demonically ironic when im sippin this tonic
head spinnin faster then sonic, when blazing this chronic
introducing pain painfully, placing people in peril
brakin bones badly, bastards bleeding in barrels



hook

This is hardly a warning, you need to get away now (echo)
...Im the bully on the playground
I'll strip you for everything you got
I'll even take your life, and let your body rot

I'm a Renegade (a renegade)
and I aint afraid (i aint afraid)
So if your felling lucky to night
come and Kombat with a Mortal and Test Your Might

Verse 2

I bring the cold shit, cuz im heartless, im frozen
an omen will surface and stop all the bullshit
and make it clear for everybody with eyes
On Point Entertainment is about to arise

you can keep on runnin, keep on strugglin
keep on trying but aint receiving nothin
we takin it all and leaving you hungry
if you got a problem with it, then were leaving you hung, b

im a menace to society, man its
sad, how your on my dick so much it cant replenish
you fools are my fuel, your my tools
im skippin to my lou, cause i aint got shit else to do

when your a don like, you will see what i mean
i got the whole damn universe kissin my feet
you dont wanna fuck wit me boy, get your ass destroyed
im hittin you with the force of an asteroid
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[graffpaper]

its was pretty good, to be honest..... not really feein the scarface intro cause its been done so many times but whatevers whatever..... the beats was pretty ill...... the flow was a iffy in some spots but for the most part sounded legit..... quality was just a little ehh...... i will say lyrical content was dope just gotta push that delivery a little bit......... all in all this was pretty nice but with a little more time on it could be very dope.......

[Falix]

thanks yo, i know my delivery lacks, i hear it 20 times a day, lol

[graffpaper]

naw, it aint bad fam, you just over-anunciated some words...... but other than that you came widdit.........

[Mel Gibson]

Ya he does.

But i'm still gonna drop my verse.

Just not now.

[DKayThePrez]

i agree man shit was pretty kool beat was raw keep dropping track bruh and work on emotion and delivery. keep elevating.

[Pen.]

oh shiz, he made it >.< wussup fam. lol


Anyway youve always had nice lyrics, just the way you deliver them, is the way you make a track, once you have that, youll be seriously dope...flow was iight on this, delivery is better then usual, beat is ill as shit, just that delivery, even tho i know you know that lol, had to let ya know...good track tho! keep it up

[Serpent01]

This is good, I like this shit.

[BananaCock]

I hated your lyrics on this one. Too Net Cee'ish. Especially the demonically ironic...blah blah. Demonically ironic? That doesn't make sense. "A dire of thirst?" What? Dire is used improperly. Had some good melodies though. And I think I've been pretty supportive of ya' in the past, but this track was ca ca doo doo for me.

I still think you rush shit. Need to relax, take your time. And re-listen before you Edit>Bounce to track>Upload.

Keep dropping Bune.

[Falix]

uppin